Read The Man's Story.

Read the man's story.

I love how people working with Beta materials.It's so good and well written.I hope will see more situations from canon as well.So for the question itself.I think you'll left the part with Kleiner.You know the nasty one.I hope not but it's not my decision after all.So good luck friend!

Thanks a lot! Chapter 2 is nearing completion but it'll have to wait until after my exams.

As for Kleiner, I don't want to give out too many spoilers, but no. I won't put in the "doc you poor sap" scene for several reasons. For one, the only instance of its existence is in one old map prototype, and frankly from Barney's mildly annoyed reaction it seems like it might never have been the plan to have the scene go that way, maybe they put it in as a joke. The main reason is that I just don't WANT Kleiner to die at the start of the story, that would be a waste of a character. I want him to play a role throughout the story, not just one scene.

Stay tuned and prepare for unforeseen consequences :)